The Viewer's Opinions

To make sure I'm on the right track with my stop motion becoming an exhibition piece, I got two people to view my latest stop motion and my draft description individually, then tell me what they thought I was describing and how well or not I have produced this as an exhibition piece. The first person was my friend Tash who didn't know anything about coding or my project. The second was Shanshan who is pretty much an expert on coding from both a design and a computer science perspective. This was their feedback:

Tash: She fully understood the metaphor and how I was conveying it through the medium of a stop motion and found Josie's facial expressions quite humors. Though she didn't like how the apple wasn't always put back in the same spot because she saw the loop as always being in the same place in a list of code, she felt it is necessary to include this idea in the visuals. Her suggestion was to mark a point, that Josie could see but we couldn't, so that she knew she was putting it back in the same spot. In regards to the way I wrote my description, Tash thought it was a bit "jumpy", meaning that it would be nicer to read if each sentence flowed onto the next better.

Shanshan: Of course she fully understood my metaphor and stop motion, she thought it was actually quite interesting to watch even though the action is quite repetitive. She really liked how I had thought about the way Josie dressed and those type of small details. Her suggestions for improvement were to enhance the aesthetics saying "we are not film students, we are design students". She thought it might be quite nice to include some post production on the images by maybe even giving it a tone or playing with the contrast and brightness or something simple like that, so it is no longer just a series of plain photographs. After reading the description she thought that it was unnecessary to highlight the details of the setting at the beginning of the description, because for her the stop motion starts when Josie walks in. She suggested that I still include these details but maybe put them towards the end of the description, so for those who just want to quickly find out whats happening they can get the idea within the first half of the description and others who are more patient can read the whole thing. Over all she was really impressed at how effectively I explained the term of loops, and thought the music was very well suited and justifiable in the clip.